the values we are trying to express honesty. ithink that are group did well in choosing the music and titles. we still need a bit editing and music. we want to know about the video is the quality. the challange we faced was we where rushed when filming.
the conflict was between a a boy choosing to do the right or wrong thing on cheating. here are shots, dialog and actions that contributed to the rising action 1.when the teacher leaves the class 2.when the kid gets up and sharpens its pencil 3.when the kid looks out the door t c if the teacher is comming 4.when the student sees himself taking the test. here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:you could have the student think about taking the answer sheet you could also:have the teacher walk in before he goes in looks at it the climax occured when:the student grabs the answer sheet. in the resolution the student turns in 3 papers one bein g the test another being the answer sheet and a 3rd being a happy birthday card you could add to the resoulution by having the student think he had also tuned in the answers we especially like the classroom shot of then class and teacher because it helped emphasize the idea that we were in an actual school we think that you might replace shot where the door is in view for a couple of seconds the new shot would be a short shot of the door for maybe 2 sec. we rated the editing a 8 one edit we woulkd change was when the student sharpens the pencil we noticed between the looking at the answers shot and the imagening he took the paper cross disolve instead to make it seemed like he changed his mind. (no music) the title was catchy you guys could do a little less on some shot times and can improve on editing some sences (no credits) overall we tought your film coulkd use alot of room for improvements. what we liked the best was the message and classroom setting our strongest suggestion is that you could plan your plot better. feedback given by Jorge Chavez & Alicia Fernandez
the conflict was between a a boy choosing to do the right or wrong thing on cheating.
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1.when the teacher leaves the class
2.when the kid gets up and sharpens its pencil
3.when the kid looks out the door t c if the teacher is comming
4.when the student sees himself taking the test.
here are some suggestions about adding to the rising action:you could have the student think about taking the answer sheet
you could also:have the teacher walk in before he goes in looks at it
the climax occured when:the student grabs the answer sheet.
in the resolution the student turns in 3 papers one bein g the test another being the answer sheet and a 3rd being a happy birthday card
you could add to the resoulution by having the student think he had also tuned in the answers
we especially like the classroom shot of then class and teacher because it helped emphasize the idea that we were in an actual school
we think that you might replace shot where the door is in view for a couple of seconds the new shot would be a short shot of the door for maybe 2 sec.
we rated the editing a 8 one edit we woulkd change was when the student sharpens the pencil we noticed between the looking at the answers shot and the imagening he took the paper cross disolve instead to make it seemed like he changed his mind.
(no music)
the title was catchy
you guys could do a little less on some shot times and can improve on editing some sences
(no credits)
overall we tought your film coulkd use alot of room for improvements. what we liked the best was the message and classroom setting our strongest suggestion is that you could plan your plot better.
feedback given by Jorge Chavez & Alicia Fernandez